My book writing

Hello Friends and anyone who cares to read.

I have recently finished Chapter 1 of my book (again for those that have read my previous version) and I am going to post it here. The Chapters are split in 3 parts: the story of Galnorath Gargen and his friends, the story of Gabriella Gargen (Galnorath's sister). and Draknathar Gargen (Galnorath's brother). I am posting the first part now and if people want to read the rest of chapter 1 with Gabriella and Draknathar, then I will post part 2 and 3 as well. ALL FEEDBACK IS WELCOME! Positive and negative as long as it is constructive. One thing I may need to add is "character 1 said, character 2 said, etc" for my dialogue if the dialogue is too confusing to tell who is talking. If I do need that then I will edit the post itself as well as my actual book so it can be more clear.

Thanks in advance for any and all readers and feedback.

Edit: Also forgot to add that I can post the prologue as well if anyone is interested in reading that part as well.

Post it all - I love this stuff =p